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Please, save me
I'm going under
Please, save me
I'm drowning in my tears

Please, save me
I'm not gonna make it
Please, save me
I don't want to lose this battle

Please, save me
But you ignored my plea
Please, save me
You left me for dead

Please, don't save me
For this time, I will save myself
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Yeah, bacilly what I think now a days :3 I know that I have gotten stronger and this time, I will save myself :3

Also I didn't feel like getting a picture for this :D And for the new watchers, I double post on saturday and sunday :3
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*CaledonCat Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
As long as you don't WANT to loose your battle you WON'T.As long as you don't want to you will be strong enough.After this barrle you will be even stronger.

Beautiful very touching poem.
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~i-am-tsukiko Mar 25, 2012  Student General Artist
Alice in wonderland pool of tears...that's what I thought of.

Aside from that, I really like this, my thoughts is that it's for standing up for yourself, when others wont.
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~Julybugg Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
While the premise is powerful enough here, I really don't think it's been carried through as well as you're probably capable of doing. The poem as a whole feels rather repetitive, and the rhythm is made a little bland by the unvaried line length. Overall, I just don't think there's much in this piece that really makes it jump out or feel that memorable to me - though, like I said, I don't doubt that with a little extra effort there'd be a vast improvement in execution. Don't be a generic poet in a sea of generic poets.
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:icontoxicotic:
Cheer up, emo kid.
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~Julybugg Mar 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Seconded.
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:iconmswikit:
You just kind of hit the nail on the head. I applaud you.
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:iconmswikit:
While it isn't necessarily bad, this poem isn't memorable to me at all. It's like you took a bunch of Evanescence lyrics and put them into one poem. Work on coming up with more original metaphors and ideas.
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So true and honest. Lovely.
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