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Open the gate
But enter at risk
If you lose
Then you won't be able to quit

Do not stray
You will get lost
If you do
Then you won't find the way

Open the gate
But enter at risk
I got lost
And now I wish I could quit
If you open the gates to a heart, and you go in, if that person leaves you, it feels like you're trapped inside something that doesn't beat or care for you at all :)
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luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2012  Student Writer
love how you paired the picture with the poem
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NightMeadow Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
håber ikke det har noget med mig at gøre?
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Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Neida :3 Skrev denne for ei stund siden :D
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NightMeadow Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Godt! :D ( pwhew ) :3
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Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
DU er grunnen eg finner veien kjære :3
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NightMeadow Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Det gør mig mere end glad :3
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Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Good my love :3
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NightMeadow Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Haha :3 :3
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Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2012
Back to that EVIL norwegian assignment -.- -.- -.- I HATE IT XD XD XD
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:iconnightcreaturelurking:
I like it
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Zuko86 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
oh, and that goes for the rest of your gallery, not just this particular piece.

I hope you understand what I am saying. I'm not trying to be rude, but you need to understand that what you're doing is wrong and i don't like how you are trying to find loopholes, so to speak.
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RoyalFlowerGarden Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012  Student Artist
thank you
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Zuko86 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Using wallpapers other than wallpapers is wrong. So, there is a copyright issue in that. Just wanted to let you know.

Also, I think it's wrong of you to assume that if you don't see a copyright symbol, that it's automatically OK to use a photo because that is not the case. Here is a link to give you better understanding: [link]

When it comes to photos, when in doubt, assume it’s subject to copyright and don’t use it without the appropriate permission.

To be honest, I'm really tired of you using other people's work to get attention. Make your own photos or something. It's really disrespectful and unethical. And yet, you try to find ways to get around the "copyright" issue (such as saying "its a free for all because I didn't see a copyright" or "it's a wallpaper, so it's a free for all". Enough with the "free for all" nonsense.

Please, don't be so ignorant. People will start to lose respect for you for not respecting others works.
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ShatteredMoon96 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
ok what does the gate represent?
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hunter27a6 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
nice and simple <3
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jazziturelove Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
but you never know till you try
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wolfgirl07 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
wow:-)
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leo729 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
cool
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lorrikach Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Japanese girl in the massage parlor !! [link]
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kayla52357 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Wow, this is awesome. I love it!
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CrystalBroussard Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Professional Photographer
I'm still slightly jarred by the number of views on this 'poem', perhaps there is something missing that I'm not aware of .... however, I would have to agree with the general consensus here... it's very bland and has an 'anyone could have wrote this' vibe, I enjoy poems that are somewhat melodic when you read them... this is a series of short jabs, doesn't flow well nor read well, in my opinion. Sort of mediocre for its' # of views. The photograph however is ancient, it's probably been floating around the internet now for a decade.
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La-Tachuela Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the picture and the poem! Very Cool!!!
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minsa Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student Artist
ooooooooooo that was freaking nice good job :thumbsup:
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DarkFoolOfPoetry Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I feel like the poem was lacking a bit of originality and flavor. Other than that, it's fine
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Divinie Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
It makes me think of Eurydice and Orpheus. :)
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LakeSong Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful
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Beau-Beau-Hiboux Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very epic indeed :) It reminds me of dante's inferno
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DaughterofInsanity16 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I especially just like the Picture it has.. but the poem's fine too.
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Avield Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
Love the drawing... but the poem is kinda lame.

Seems very forced and bland. The word choice is pathetic and theme is very general and non-specific.

It is almost like a draft of something better. I would look at it again and fix it.
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alcoholergicDwarf Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
it's funny, it reminds me an album cover... But yours is really great too :)
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Adam199 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
i really like it!
check out my page and watch me, i draw whatevr pepole want!
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dreamsoffallingskies Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
love that poem
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Purple-Skeleton Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student General Artist
kinda reminds me of drugs
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Professional Writer
I think more thought, etcetera and etcetera could have gone into this poem.
The poem in no way described the heart or even hinted about it in any way.
It dully reads as someone merely opening a gate and getting deeply lost.
This is very cliché, perhaps, too cliché with the concept of 'if you enter you
may not return/find your way/get lost' thing.

This could have had more potential. I want to know MORE. You should never
have to make up for the difference of what is missing in a poem by writing
the missing piece(s) in your Artist's Comment. This further shows it needs work.

I hope this helps.
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Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Thanks for the feedback! :D I will try to write longer in the future, but I have a problem with that for the moment :) Also I want to add, that when I write a poem I also want other people to put THEIR story into it and feel like: I have felt this way. That's why I didn't hint to a heart in the poem, I did say my story in the description and others might put their story in it :)

Have A Nice Day :D
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RoyalFlowerGarden Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Student Artist
you came here because of the pic too didn't you? lol
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Zuko86 Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2012
Many people are.
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VicariouSoul Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012  Professional Writer
Not at all. Before I click on a deviation I hover my mouse
over the picture to see what category it's under because
I am very much into writing.
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frei76 Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2012
Very suggestive! I know I already said this, anyway... I admire your talent!
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