Shop Mobile More Submit  Join Login


Don't cry, I'm still alive
My body just died, I'm still alive
My spirit has moved on, to the skies
My body died, but I'm still alive

Tell dad, he was the best he could be
Tell mom, that I loved her more than I could see
Tell my siblings, that I will miss their laughs
Don't cry, I'm still alive

I just needed, one more cut
But that was more, than enough
I cut to deep in my wrist, now my body is drained
Please, Don't cry, I'm still alive

What I did, I left them behind
Now I'm with god, and his angels alike
But when I look down, I regret
I see all the pain, I have spread

Don't cry, I'm still alive
Don't cry, my funeral is just a goodbye
But it's not forever, for you will see
In heaven we will be joined, and that is a joy for me
I got inspired by this song: [link] And a tear I shed when I was in a forest, the teardrop just, lay on a leaf, as if it was fighting for its life :) That teardrop has helped me, maybe it's a small thing, but it made me realize that whatever you are, whatever you have done, there is something that will save you and keep you going :) Also, when I was a cutter, I was very close to my pulse one day, and that's when I asked myself: What are you doing? Think of everyone, do you want to leave them behind? After that I threw my razor and screamed, a chapter of my life I'm not proud of but I will be honest about it :)

[link] Here is the link for the picture :D Hope you like it :)
Add a Comment:
 
:iconinsomniac-corpse:
Insomniac-Corpse Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
That's so sad and beautiful written!
I'm still crying ^^'
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Aug 30, 2012
I'm glad you like it :3
Reply
:iconi-am-tsukiko:
i-am-tsukiko Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2012  Student General Artist
Amazimg. The reptition really added to it~
I just went to a poetry slam yesterday, it was pretty awesome!
Reply
:icontatibear:
Tatibear Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Artist
I-its really good.... crying? Me? What? Pshh... really liked it :3
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
Lol XD Glad you liked it :D
Reply
:icontatibear:
Tatibear Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Artist
Mhm Keep up the good work :3
Reply
:iconmehtab123:
mehtab123 Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012
Nice
Reply
:iconxynpocari:
xynpocari Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
..........................BWWWWAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!! this made me cry....... :iconsadplz:
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
THen you felt the emotion I put in it :3 Almost cried myself while writing ^^
Reply
:iconwurzelnator:
Wurzelnator Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
nice
Reply
:iconpoison-root:
Poison-Root Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2012
:heart:
Reply
:iconrefugnic:
Refugnic Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm...while this is a very nice piece of poetry, I have two things to say.
First: Assuming you believe in heaven (and thereby hell) you wouldn't go to god and his angels, but to Lucifer and his brethren, because Suicide is Murder...you murder yourself...which disqualifies you for heaven.

What's more...there's a saying regarding this topic.
When does a man die?
When a bullet pierces his heart?
When a poison destroys his body?
When sickness has taken it's toll?
No...
A man only truly dies...when he is forgotten.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
In the new testament there is only one suicide, and that is Judas, after betraying Jesus. In the early days suicide was a sign of a martyr, But in my eyes, as long as you have accepted Jesus as your savior and believe in him, then you will go there, thats my point of view.

Well then in your eyes many people who did bad things are alive, I think that when the body dies and the spirit carries on, then your dead :) Thats my views ofc
Reply
:iconrefugnic:
Refugnic Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not THAT good with the bible to be blunt...and Judas wasn't a martyr...because a martyr dies for the things he believes in.
Judas betrayed Jesus, couldn't live with the feeling of shame and regret and committed suicide...no 'belief' included.

That said, it's a rather touchy subject...religion, I mean.
If you accept Jesus as your saviour, that'd mean that all those, who killed good people in the name of their faith, would go to heaven.

That'd mean, that all those terrorists, who killed themselves and others in suicide bombings go to heaven as well...simply because they did it 'to honour their god'.

In the old testament, book Moses, God gave the humans the ten commandments.
And one of them is (as you already know): Thou shalt not kill.

That includes yourself as well as the others.
Now, if those people who committed this 'grave sin', which cannot be undone, went to heaven, because they did it due to a twisted belief go to heaven...just who goes to hell?

But yeah, many people who did terrible things managed to obtain immortality...in history books, the collective memory of the world.

Regarding your view: How can you say: 'I'm still alive', if you say that a person dies the moment the soul leaves the body?
I'm not arguing your point, I'm just curious about the 'contradiction'.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
Jesus forgave Judas, it was a part of Jesus plan, he didn't stop Judas, he forgave him :)

And religion dosnt give you a reason to kill, it never has, and those who stay true to their believes they know that :)

Those terrorists they misread the bible or the koran or whatever they read, because the three major religons do not support killing

And the new testement was to end the old testament and much of what stands there, you can choose to follow the 10 comittments but you do not have to, thats a choise :)

I said the body died :) Not the soul, I believe that the soul lives on :)
Reply
:iconrefugnic:
Refugnic Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, maybe Jesus did...but Judas didn't forgive himself. That was my point.
Most certainly it doesn't.

Terrorists didn't 'misread' their holy scripture, but are exploiting phrases to convince those who are unhappy with themselves and the world, that it'll get better if they die for their faith...they're nothing but politicians, looking for power.
After all, I never saw Osama Bin Laden with a bomb belt.

The ten commandments are a good thing, if you ask me...much of the other stuff however...not so much, you're right about that. (Kain and Abel, for example :P)

Well, maybe we missed each other there. You said: 'The person dies'...as in: The person is gone.

However I do agree, that the soul lives on...WHERE it goes after death, is a matter of speculation and religion though.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012
I havnt read much about terrorism, and I'm to young to even know much about it, when 9/11 happened i was around 6 or 7, so i do not remember much about it or any other terrorist action.

And in my eyes, religion is there to spread safty and trust, I think religion is: Opium For The People, if you have heard that phase before :#
Reply
:iconrefugnic:
Refugnic Featured By Owner Feb 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Well, it'd be wrong for me to judge those events.
I've only heard and read about it in the media, but since I'm from Europe, it's been too far away for me to actually be...terrified.

I mean, it was a horrible event and a dark day in human history...but what followed in the years after that, is, in my opinion, just as wrong as the act of terrorism in itself.

Because all they ever achieved with their 'War on Terror' was fuel to the machinery. Because each time a family father is killed, their sons take to the terrorists, seeking revenge...and a LOT of family fathers were killed...regardless of whether they were terrorists or not.

And yeah, I agree with you there...religion seeks to supply an answer to one of the oldest questions...what happens after our life runs out. 'Knowing', that something comes after we fade away is a great comfort in itself.

And yeah, I heard the phrase before.
Reply
:iconluvserenity000:
luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Writer
wow its so deep. i love it
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012
I'm glad that you liked it :)
Reply
:iconluvserenity000:
luvserenity000 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Student Writer
!) :hug:
Reply
:iconvampire-moon-101:
vampire-moon-101 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Writer
cool dude... this really speaks to me :0
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
I'm glad that you liked it ^^
Reply
:iconvampire-moon-101:
vampire-moon-101 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Writer
cool^^
Reply
:icongirlydude2:
girlydude2 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
This is amazing, I can relate to this especially right now but things are getting better, I guess.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
I'm glad its going the right way :D
Reply
:iconsarahmint:
Sarahmint Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
I thought this was from the twilight zone episode based on the title and image.
Reply
:iconnyiminn:
nyiminn Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
I love that one !
Reply
:iconkaokaokyo:
Kaokaokyo Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
This is beautiful. I had almost died from suicide but was found and resuscitated. The physical pain of dying isn't comparable to anything I have experienced before or since. Afterwards while I was attempting to just pull myself through the days this song came on my radio. I froze when I heard the lyrics and sat barely breathing and not moving with my eyes pouring tears like a fucking fire hose.

You are so amazing that you kept living. I'm so proud of you.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
I'm glad that you loved it, and that you are still living, life is a wonderfull gift, that I hope noone will give up on :)
Reply
:iconfika-with-alice:
fika-with-alice Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student Photographer
[link] I has a picture just like this! :D
Reply
:iconxxsayaxxpoison:
xxsayaxxpoison Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist Artist
it's deep and beauitful I love it
Reply
:iconcreate1ders:
create1ders Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
I wanted to make a Portal joke, but that's not a laughing matter :/
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
:)
Reply
:iconcathrinep:
cathrinep Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student General Artist
thank you. you may have just changed my mind about cutting
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
That warms my heart :D Cutting is never the awnser XD
Reply
:iconrussian-royedal:
Russian-Royedal Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I. CANT. HANDRE. THESE. FEELINGSSSSS... D':
I'm crying too much.
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
Sometimes it helps to cry ^^
Reply
:iconrussian-royedal:
Russian-Royedal Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I know. :)
Reply
:iconrussian-royedal:
Russian-Royedal Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
@tempestSylph: ME TOO. :'( I can't wait for the third season
Reply
:icontempestsylph:
tempestSylph Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
First thing I thought of when I read the title was Sherlock. SOBS.

But my gosh this is wonderful.
Reply
:iconallowneya:
allowneya Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
Powerful
Reply
:iconrandombrooke:
randombrooke Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
AWHHH! this is so sweet. i'm glad you stopped cutting. i've had friends that do that and a sister that did it cuz of my parents divorce and it's so hard to hear when it happens..theres always hope and a better future. <3
Reply
:iconlukewind15:
Lukewind15 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow..that is amazing..
Reply
:iconmuterabbit:
MuteRabbit Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
<3
Reply
:iconhudgens77:
hudgens77 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Hobbyist
Wow. This is so powerful:heart:
Reply
:iconjanettiehelf:
JanettiehELF Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I wish my friend was able to say this before last week... This is beautiful
Reply
:iconwildchild9:
Wildchild9 Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautifully sorrowful. :happycry: :heart:
Reply
:iconkaren-chanoverdrive:
Karen-chanOVERDRIVE Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2012
I love this! The poem is amazing, I know how you felt.

The song reminds me of this one about two months ago, my friend in college came back to visit my school, and I really missed her and I really look up to her. I was about ready to give up (I have my own special way of *cutting*) and I couldnt take it anymore but she came up to me the day she came back, and we talked for about five minutes when she said "You seem stressed." so I nodded and said "a little" so she says "Dont worry. Keep your chin up, things will get better." and then she smiled at me and gave me a hug. I was ready to cry. Now, whenever I feel like giving up I write her words down on a piece of paper and carry it around with me in my pocket. She has no idea how much she has helped me.

Sorry, today was a tough day and then I read this and-

but your poem is really awesome, thank you for that
Reply
:iconmeandor117:
Meandor117 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012
I think you should tell her :)
Reply
Add a Comment:
 
×

:iconmeandor117: More from Meandor117


Featured in Collections

Writing by elousia

.:poetry, writings, journals, quotes by hudgens77


More from DeviantArt



Details

Submitted on
February 22, 2012
File Size
958 bytes
Link
Thumb

Stats

Views
11,278
Favourites
816 (who?)
Comments
316
×